1
They showed me a dream
A beautiful house by the brook
The sound of rushing water
Like an audible caress
Waking me up in the morning
They showed me the lush gardens
Green mazes stretching before my eyes
They showed me sprawling country sides
And then they showed me the tittle deed
It had my name on it
And I said “but…”
2
They showed me a young lady
Beautiful to look at
Happy
Fulfilled
Loving and loved
I saw her
She woke with a smile on her face
Walked with a spring in her step
And had a song on her lips
They showed me her picture
It looked like me
And I said “but…”
3
They showed me this high-flying lady
Gucci this, Fendi that
Private jet
CEO of a Fortune 500 company
I saw her life
Saw how she used fame and fortune
To create an avalanche of change
Children were fed
Infant mortality reduced
Women and men empowered anew
I even felt her contentment
It felt like mine!
Then I said “but…”
4
This morning I officiated at a burial
It was a mass burial
“But” died
“But I’m not good enough”
“But I am not pretty enough”
“But such things don’t happen to me”
“But it has never happened in my family or my nation”
“But how?”
“But why?”
All the “Buts” died
And today, I gave myself wings
So I can fly
Fly…
Into the tomorrow I see!
Post-script
I tried a new format with my poem, by putting pictures to depict the theme of each paragraph. Let me know what you think. Did it work for you or not? And why? I got the photos from:
1. Home-www.wakpaper.com
2. The beautiful lady- http://www.clutchmagonline.com
3. The private jet- http://www.trendzona.com
and
4. the Lady Priest- http://www.thetelegraph.co.uk
Beautiful! I felt the intensity of every word! I buried my buts too! Your poem was like it’s requiem high mass! Thanks! God bless you
I like the poems! Can I go present it at Freedom Hall- A show of talents?
Feel free to! Thank you so much for stopping by.
This is a wonderful composition. The pictures made the peom have life. I agree with you that we need to kill the ‘buts’ in our lives to be able to live our dreams. Cheers
I am so glad you liked the pictures! I thought so too but it’s not something I see in poetry, so I wanted to sample opinions! Yes, yes! Let’s kill all the ‘but’s’, according to Thomas Edison “if we did all the things we are capable of doing, we will literally astound ourselves”.
Very interesting!
Irene
Thank you Irene! I really appreciate that you stopped by!
Beautiful piece Haj, the pictures gave life to the words.
It’s so simple and instructive. I’ll ensure i abide by the message.
The pix worked very well for me, though I’ll prefer them coming after their respective poems, instead of before.
Thank you so much for the feedback Muna, will use that styling for my next poem and see. Sounds good!
Please abide by the message! You Muna are so intelligent, so driven… and no excuse should stop you, if one person can thrive in this country, you can!
Nice poem! The pictures may it easier to comprehend.. In 2 words Motivation and self realization
Thank you so much for the feedback Jane and your kind comment! It is appreciated!
Beautiful Haj.
Thank you my dear Sophia!
The Butt’s, hhhmmm! wonderful i must say.
Haj, I love the truthfulness, simplicity and clarity of the poem. It spoke to me. Thank. The pictures really work to underscore the message and to create a visual interest.
Yaaaaay! Finally! You visited my blog! Lol! Thank you! I’m glad it spoke to you. Thank you for stopping by and thank you for the feedback re the photos. I appreciate it, big hug!